I can summon outrageous partners

Finished another copy.

Okay.

Finally he let out a sigh of relief.

Write it down after the settlement.

I will still say what should be said, I hope that those who keep books can subscribe and slaughter it.

Subscriptions are the little leather whip for antennas.

Snapped! Snapped! Snapped! shelf!

Then I chat with everyone on a daily basis. Today, this time, I mainly talk about the shortcomings I found in this dungeon.

[The following content involves serious spoilers for the copy. Readers who have not seen the copy and plan to read it, please do not continue reading. 】

For this dungeon, unlike the previous ones, I am not very satisfied. It is a passing story at best, but not excellent.

Because when I wrote the copy in the middle and late stages, I was still in the process of writing, and I found that I could write better in terms of handling many details, and these details could no longer be modified in the middle stage, so it evolved into my heart. Spinule.

I have been regretting it later, why did I write it like this at the beginning? Isn't it better to write like this? Were Watts in the head at the time? Why is it the current self who is tormented by what he committed half a month ago?

I will now list the points that I think can be improved completely.

One: With regard to dungeon settings and information, in some cases it can be presented in a more authoritative way, and if it is the premise of decryption, the best way is to display them in the early stage.

In this dungeon, the demon king's information was told to Lin Li through the mouths of Nobita and the Space-Time Patrol Team. There is a problem with this. The information is not known all at once, but is obtained slowly and continuously during the process.

The sooner this kind of information is given, the more fun readers will feel when the secret is finally revealed, no matter whether they guess right or wrong. For example, regarding the method of replacing the person, I feel that I wrote it too late, and after a few chapters, I will continue to reveal the secret.

The solution I'm thinking of now is to have more props like the magical conch, or if necessary, when the hero enters the dungeon to take over the role, use the system to tell a lot of authoritative information like a script kill.

sorry!

Second: The focus of the role is a bit biased, and it is easy to misplace expectations.

The main characters in this dungeon are Time and Space Patrol, Nobita, and Demon King.

But the problem is that the patrol team and the devil can be understood as derivative new characters. What you want to see is to interact with the children you are familiar with in childhood. Fat Tiger and the others, but I write less. This is also one of my problems. Will pay more attention later.

sorry!

Third: The text description is not good enough, the dungeon is a bit messy, and I am really a waste when it comes to fighting.

The text description is mainly reflected in the explanation of 'personality' and 'time discontinuity', but part of the reason is because it involves God, which will be pulled out and explained formally later.

sorry!

Fourth: The details are not dealt with.

Kameda's letter was super superfluous, using Lin Li's brain to deduce the chronological order, this is what should be written in deciphering.

The purpose of that letter is to further break the relationship between the system and the copy at the end. I don't need to write the chronological order at all, just write some Kameda teasing Lin Li casually, and just make an appointment to meet.

I was such an idiot that day, I realized this problem very early, and even after I posted it, I felt something was wrong, and the thief regretted it, oh, my stupid groundhog.

Super super sorry!

Fifth: Undertake the ending of the climax, which is almost meaningless this time.

When I wrote that I didn't feel very comfortable and smooth like diarrhea, I was already miserable in advance.

Taking out Doraemon's outrageous props to reverse the process of torturing the devil, this fighting part, a one-word evaluation: la la la la la la la la la la!

I will not focus on this part of the orgasm in the future, but will change it in other ways.

sorry!

Sixth: In fact, the copy can't be selected.

The water depth of "Doraemon" is too deep, I can't grasp it...

The outrageousness and paradoxes of the world itself are difficult to be logically self-consistent. This actually caused great difficulties for my creation. In some places, it is forcibly rounded up for the sake of this world.

For a unit drama, they are not responsible for taking out props and using them, and do not consider the paradox between props at all, but when writing, there will be readers who will criticize.

Why not use XXX, it's obviously possible at this time...

So I banned the time-type BUG props from the beginning, and let the devil pretend that the props were damaged...

But after all, this is still a problem that I have encountered in the selection of dungeons. In the following dungeons, the choice should be more cautious.

sorry!

Seventh: The way of thinking cannot be changed, and it is easy to be different.

When I wrote the luxury flashlight, I found that the comment section had already seen the reminder of the living thing, and my pupils trembled: I thought the foreshadowing was actually zooming in on my face?

So in order to get more surprises from the decryption, I can only start to find supplements and reduce the plot of "Doraemon".

This also led to another effect. I didn't write about the plot of the tenth person on the patrol.

Originally, he was supposed to be another smoke bomb, but I missed it, and I brought it in a few strokes, I really deserve to die...

Even if everyone guesses it next time, I will bite the bullet and write!

sorry!

Eighth: As for the whole book, it’s been a long time since I summoned a new character, maybe everyone misses it a bit.

In fact, what I initially imagined was that this dungeon has a "summon" - Doraemon, but this is not a collision between characters with different styles of painting after all, and it feels almost meaningless to write it out.

I'm already aware of this, and will note later that during the overworld period, there should be a rather outrageous experience character summoned, as well as new permanent characters.

sorry!

...

There are still some problems, but I will not list them one by one. I have already regretted almost 2,000 words.

I am not afraid of problems, but I am afraid that no problems have been found. If you have any bad impressions, you can comment on this article, and I will like it to show that I have seen it (be gentle, let me be glassy).

Although I wrote a million words before writing this book, it is not the same type of book at all, so I can still be regarded as a cute new author, more tolerant and more loving.

Now I want to play new things in each dungeon, it is normal to have problems, but I hope that I can continue to improve, gain wisdom from the pitfalls, and write better stories.

The disadvantages and benefits of the dungeon flow are here, every dungeon is a new starting point!

above.

The dungeon is over, please take two days off to adjust the status.

The next copy should also be an IP that everyone has seen, and it is still active today.

mwah.

Street antenna.